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the term 'race' is what humans use instead of 'breed' cause calling them diffrent 'breeds' of humans makes them sound like animals [which we are, weather the large part of scociety wants to admit it or not] so indeed in this case it would be 'interspecies' not 'interrace' to be interracial kazooie would have to be a bear, but of a diffrent subspecies...sorry for technical jargan, love the comic though.

edit: then again, the red neck idiot in question is obviously too dumb to know that sorta thing so...yeah.
also, ouch, that had to hurt

elderflowerpudding

10 years, 9 months ago

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@ PrysmTKitsune

that's fair. but one wrong word isn't worth releasing an update over and making everyone download the new file.

PrysmTKitsune

10 years, 9 months ago

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and like i said, we can just say the ofending dummy is too stupid to know the diffrence anyway...hope kazooie pecks his eyes out.

DreamGod

10 years, 9 months ago

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@ PrysmTKitsune

Considering Banjo's mood, it'd probably be more of a Breegull Bash. XD

Zippo

10 years, 9 months ago

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naw I wasnt looking to do that for the image, but yar two diffrent species vs same species with diffrent races, kind of thing... but it dosent matter that much ether

kemosabe

10 years, 9 months ago

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@ Zippo

that wouldn't be painfully overhanded and cliche, though.

elderflowerpudding

10 years, 9 months ago

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@ kemosabe

*raises eyebrow* yes it would :P

veemon657

10 years, 9 months ago

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the plot thickens just like my sausage gravy and i mean the kind you use for breakfast you sicko's

SpaceShipEarth

10 years, 9 months ago

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YAY another page

Sillydraco

10 years, 9 months ago

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wut

NeksusCat

10 years, 9 months ago

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Well now, that was quick, plain and rude. Just as those asses like to do it. Now i bet that lyzard would be surprised that bear took his punch with ease and the Fist of Fate already pick some scale covered sckull to be breaken.

DaPornicopia

10 years, 9 months ago

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*cues Guile's Theme from Street Fighter 2* Round 1! Fight!

NeksusCat

10 years, 9 months ago

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*Bear charges, then hits*
Fist of Fate!
*sckull-bone
crash*
*plays FF9 victory theme*
Party has gained 10exp, 150gil and one lyzard hide.

DaPornicopia

10 years, 9 months ago

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Level Up! New move: Breegull Javelin Toss.

Kazooie: Wait, what?!

*Banjo throws her back to his place*

NeksusCat

10 years, 9 months ago

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Kazooie learned 'Bulge Stroke'.
But she's already know 4 moves.
What move you want to exchange?
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Cloaca Eyecandy
Verbal Tease
Sex Vision
Peck
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DaPornicopia

10 years, 9 months ago

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Get rid of Peck.

NeksusCat

10 years, 9 months ago

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Kazooie get rid of Peck and learns Bulge Stroke.
1.. 2.. 3.. And Kazooie learned Bulge Stroke.
She's eager to use it. ;3

DaPornicopia

10 years, 9 months ago

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And that's the joke, everyone. X3

NeksusCat

10 years, 9 months ago

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But she really is! Just look how she teases Banjo about his stiffy! x3

DaPornicopia

10 years, 9 months ago

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I've honestly run out of reference ideas. And you provide a good point.

NeksusCat

10 years, 9 months ago

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Banjo learned Stiffy.
Banjo used Stiffy on Kazooie.
It was supereffective!
Kazooie's affection and love had rise.
(and i just played the first 3 games green, blue and red! XD)

Andy

10 years, 9 months ago

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I don't really understand how you are portraying Kazooie. She was so nice, raised in a church and everything. but as soon as she met banjo she becomes a total asshole? It seems very odd for you to have made the character all of a sudden switch personalities completely.

Jamel91

10 years, 9 months ago

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This is how Kazooie is in game. She has a sharp mouth, crude manners and does every now'n'then give Banjo a hard time for giggles. But it's all in good fun she isn't mean spirited about her teasing and cares about Banjo.

"	Andy wrote:
	I don't really understand how you are portraying Kazooie. She was so nice, raised in a church and everything. but as soon as she met banjo she becomes a total asshole? It seems very odd for you to have made the character all of a sudden switch personalities completely.

Andy

10 years, 9 months ago

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@ Jamel91

Yes, but what I am saying is there was absolutely no transition between the attitudes in the store. She was always sweet and kind, then suddenly all nasty like.

elderflowerpudding

10 years, 9 months ago

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the original idea was to have her change her attitude completely when she got belted by the rhino in the orphanage. suddenly she would see that she had been stepped on her whole life and start fighting back. like she had had this personality in her all along but never wanted to let it out because she'd get retribution for it. that was the idea behind the fight in the orphanage cafeteria, to show that she had that personality inside and that it would come out when she was provoked. you can kind of see the transition in the scene where she's just gotten beaten and is about to escape.

...but it's not very good. this story just isn't very good. :P comic writing is incredibly hard for me. i'd only ever done prose before; and this is so, so different. pacing and focus and means of explaining things and everything else. in the above comment where kemosabe said the story was cliche and over the top, troll or not, i completely agreed and have from the beginning (which you'll see if you check my comments on earlier pages). i'm working on my storytelling in this format just like kit's working on his drawing. so... your answer is: kazooie's not portrayed very well, that's my fault, and i don't fault you in any way for not understanding. i'm just happy my writing in this comic has been better than my writing in the last one.

Andy

10 years, 9 months ago

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I did not mean to sound rude. I was mostly giving my constructed criticism. Thanks for the replay back. I can see how It could be difficulty, pacing and everything you have to think of for the comic, so It is understandable some plot things don't make sense. No one ever started out perfect. I do enjoy the comic overall though, and hope you continue to get better ^.^

elderflowerpudding

10 years, 9 months ago

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you weren't rude at all! i'm just admitting you're right. thanks for your criticism and support ^.^

Dragonlord354

10 years, 9 months ago

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i think she's afraid of looking weak and being abandoned so shes being sharp and cold to cover her own fears caused by the problems in her past.

elderflowerpudding

10 years, 9 months ago

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@ Dragonlord354

this is what i was hoping to convey, yes. *nods* but--as you'll read in my above comment--i don't think i did a good job conveying it :< i'm glad you get it, though ^-^

macavity

10 years, 9 months ago

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Mmmkay

Labyrias

10 years, 9 months ago

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Okay, what am i missing... How did she get from nowhere to being this obsessed with his "stiffie"?

elderflowerpudding

10 years, 9 months ago

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@ Labyrias

https://inkbunny.net/submissionview.php?id=565241#comme...

KairoTheDragon

10 years, 9 months ago

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damn rednecks...

TrioMaxwell

10 years, 9 months ago

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Hey now... This makes a lot more sense with words attached xD

elderflowerpudding

10 years, 9 months ago

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@ TrioMaxwell

XD maybe i shoulda been sending you the dialogue along with every ink so you had a better idea of what you're doing ^^;

TrioMaxwell

10 years, 9 months ago

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Maybe... But I don't think it changes much of anything x3

Besides, I like seeing the final pages up so I can read them... Having the dialogue before hand would kinda ruin it x3

elderflowerpudding

10 years, 9 months ago

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@ TrioMaxwell

TrioMaxwell

10 years, 9 months ago

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Speaking of... I should have the next page inked soon... Got caught up in school work and a few request pieces...

elderflowerpudding

10 years, 9 months ago

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@ TrioMaxwell

yay! ^-^ your inking is always so good. the timeframe is ok this time cuz kit was sick, and we're still a bit behind.

FrostbiteTiger

10 years, 9 months ago

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uh-oh, Banjo's gonna have to pound the red out of that neck ;3 lol

LilJames

10 years, 9 months ago

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Ohhhh NOW I see where this is going, okay then, we're going this path. Well uh, who's gonna be kicking the ass of this runt first, the bird or the bear?

Kupok

10 years, 9 months ago

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Yo yo yo yo! DJ-Kazooie in the house about to Drop da B-B-B B-B-BEAK yo!

KonaNosune

10 years, 9 months ago

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@ Kupok

BWAH BA BA WUB WUB WUB WWWWUUUUUBBBBBB BASS DROP WUB DA DUB DUM

Gafildafishness

10 years, 9 months ago

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Dang, that hillbilly sure does jump to some strange conclusions awful quickly. A bird and a bear are hanging out, so they obviously must be interspecies lovers? He'd probably think I'm a homosexual just because I like hanging out with guys. Or that I'm an Italian chef just because I eat so much pasta. Or that I'm a total furry just because I love this comic! ... Actually he'd be right about that last one. ;p

elderflowerpudding

10 years, 9 months ago

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@ Gafildafishness

heh =3 well... i wouldn't say he made such a big leap as all that. he and his gang heard kazooie teasing banjo about his boner as they walked through town earlier, and there aren't that many scenarios in which she would have seen it except if they were lovers. (though this is obviously one of them.) and now they're arguing like an old married couple. i honestly think this one makes sense.

Gafildafishness

10 years, 9 months ago

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You make a valid point, but I'm not sure how similar our world is to theirs, because me and my friends joke about boners and things all the time. Then again, me and my friends are total perverts. =P

elderflowerpudding

10 years, 9 months ago

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@ Gafildafishness

yeah, my friends and i do too =P i think this guy kinda wants to jump to conclusions, though. like, he didn't even wait for a response before punching the bear :P

Gafildafishness

10 years, 9 months ago

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Yeah... I think he just wanted an excuse to be blatantly violent and ignorant. XD

ThatRedHuskyGuy

10 years, 9 months ago

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I like the way you portrayed kazooie's personality. I never played any of the games, but I like this regardless <3

elderflowerpudding

10 years, 9 months ago

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@ ThatRedHuskyGuy

hey, thanks! ^-^ i really like it too--despite the problems i'm having with clarity of message.

KonaNosune

10 years, 9 months ago

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WOOOO WEVE GOT HICS AND IMBREADS NOW!!! XD CANT WAIT FOR NEXT PAGE ERGH

HoneyScoot

10 years, 9 months ago

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Last 2 panels. My reaction: That Escalated Quickly. Really, that green dude went from inquisitive to overzealous punk real quick.

DreamGod

10 years, 9 months ago

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What's most convincing is that if the game wasn't rated E, this is almost exactly how they would be speaking. :-)

Hawkye

10 years, 9 months ago

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Because punching a bear twice your size is a good idea! :D

elderflowerpudding

10 years, 9 months ago

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@ Hawkye

yeah, he's pretty well demonstrated his idiocy by both his words and his actions. but he -does- have a posse, so... i dunno. maybe he has a reason to be confident?

KittyGuardian

10 years, 9 months ago

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