The first line, "With the Queen gone, we cannot return live to our lands. And fate has yielded in its reward, a new land to call home", is obviously wrong, let's see if I can figure out something better.
"With the queen gone, we cannot go back to live in our lands. And fate has yielded a review: a new land to call home."
The best I can think of right now, might improve it later.
The first line, "With the Queen gone, we cannot return live to our lands. And fate has yielded in it
We live among their ponies now, no longer hiding in plain sight, but watching over them not so secretly, waiting, protecting. => We live among the ponies now, no longer hiding in plain sight, but watching over them not so secretly, waiting, protecting.
We have witnessed their capacity for courage, and though we are world apart, like us their is more to them that meets the eye. => We have witnessed their capacity for courage, and though we are a world apart, like us there is more to them than meets the eye.
The rest of fixes: We live among their ponies now, no longer hiding in plain sight, but watching ov
A shame if this ends here, it wasn't that nonsense as it was expected, and comics of this style which usually doesn't use texts but pictures are a good change.
A shame if this ends here, it wasn't that nonsense as it was expected, and comics of this style whic