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Type: Comic
Published: 4 years, 11 months ago
Rating: General

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Podo
4 years, 11 months ago
BAD
Exelbirth
4 years, 11 months ago
...Breegulls Against Diabetes? Banjos And Dragons?  Beavers Aardvarks and Donkeys?
Podo
4 years, 11 months ago
I said bad because Rape makes me angry
Dachende
4 years, 11 months ago
lets gather some hunting equipment and turn their skulls and spines into tropbies!!!!!!!! I don't like rape either, and as a yautja, Anything like that is dishonoring a female, which is against our honor code. KILL THE BAD BLOODS!!!!!!!

sorry, I like to rp
Podo
4 years, 11 months ago
it's ok, I do too
jorun1981
4 years, 11 months ago
Looks so stunning. Really enjoyed to watch you stream this.
twilightstormshi
4 years, 11 months ago
kit really appreciated this comment ^^ he rarely posts replies himself, though
DraculJOSHI
4 years, 11 months ago
Does this imply that he's not just a pedophile, but also a child rapist?
twilightstormshi
4 years, 11 months ago
in my headcanon, all of the rhinos are both pedophiles and child rapists. but i'll let you interpret what you like :P
DraculJOSHI
4 years, 11 months ago
Ah, I see. I was wondering, since most people use pedophile as a synonym for child rapist. I wasn't sure whether you were doing that too or simply implying that they are both.
twilightstormshi
4 years, 11 months ago
don't worry; i know the difference. though...

i'm not going to show it in the comic because, from the girls' perspective, the rhinos are completely evil people. but it's not quite to the degree that they trap all the girls there and use them. they haven't used most of the girls, and they have a disciplining fetish mostly. they're excited when the girls get themselves into trouble.

mathilda [the porcupine] was a big troublemaker before three days ago. if this comic had been longer, i would have made kazooie come to the orphanage before mathilda was raped and then show the change in mathilda's character on the day she lost her virginity to the rhinos.

but... must push the story forward! comic pages aren't easy to do in bulk. 35 pages is already suuuuuuper hard on kit.
DraculJOSHI
4 years, 11 months ago
well, you could always do a flashback later when she actually tells somebody about it... it's important to talk about it, that's usually the first step of any therapy: confront the issue.
twilightstormshi
4 years, 11 months ago
true... but the comic's already all planned out. let's just get through it, and then we'll go back and patch up holes
Netreek
4 years, 11 months ago
I don't know if you may call it funny or not. But several years ago I wrote on cubcentral a story called Joey and friends, where a Rhino-Priest raped his younger slave. Also wanted to punish the servant of the head-priestress, since he stole the virginity of his slave. So to get his servant out of the hook she made a deal with her underling. Like said. I wrote it several years ago. The name of the Rhino was Malachius. I guess I posted a picture here on Inkbunny, drawn by arkaid (also a very old picture, when he was by the name Edis)
SpaceShipEarth
4 years, 11 months ago
And so the plot thickens
twilightstormshi
4 years, 11 months ago
like a delicious stew
SpaceShipEarth
4 years, 11 months ago
XD

PS I love   kazooie's girlfriends (Not that way... get your mind out of the gutter LOL)
twilightstormshi
4 years, 11 months ago
^-^ i'm glad. i'd be happy to set you up with one :P
SpaceShipEarth
4 years, 11 months ago
Invisiblebear
4 years, 11 months ago
*Sneaks into the adults room with a blade in hand.*
twilightstormshi
4 years, 11 months ago
there are actually two adult bedrooms, and they're on the first floor on the southeast side the building--across the hall from the nurse's office, where kazooie was last page. would you or anyone else be interested in me uploading the orphanage's floorplan?
Invisiblebear
4 years, 11 months ago
????
puppydemon20
4 years, 11 months ago
Yes! Floor plans!
twilightstormshi
4 years, 11 months ago
ruink
4 years, 11 months ago
I vote to see what happened between pages 11 and 12 if there's still time after this gets done
twilightstormshi
4 years, 11 months ago
duly noted :9
SiriusFace
4 years, 11 months ago
I've never played this game and I know absolutely nothing about it, but this comic has made me really interested to go back to my childhood and see just what I missed out on.
twilightstormshi
4 years, 11 months ago
well this is a nothing more than a prequel that speculates at how banjo and kazooie met and how kazooie got the attitude she has in the games. by which i mean it's not like these are characters in the games except for kazooie.

you know how kazooie says on this page that she wants to fall in love and go on adventures? the games are where she goes on adventures with the one she loves :3
GamerGuy4000
4 years, 11 months ago
I have no words other than "Bravo"
twilightstormshi
4 years, 11 months ago
xcar
4 years, 11 months ago
Where are pages 10 and 11?
twilightstormshi
4 years, 11 months ago
you may have mature and adult content disabled. to enable, do
account > settings > allowed ratings (on the right) > check boxes

page 10 is marked as mature for mild violence, and page 11 is marked as adult for sexual themes
ZombyWoof
4 years, 11 months ago
I've noticed that I dont have any filters active, and yet it still blocks those submissions which is very frustrating since I dont quite know how to fix that
ZombyWoof
4 years, 11 months ago
Nevermind, I misread the text about the boxes, my bad ^^;
xcar
4 years, 11 months ago
I see, you're right, I have the violence box dissable, I didn't know it dissapeared all those election, I though it just censured them, thank you for your help and patience =)
twilightstormshi
4 years, 11 months ago
= )
shaddurak
4 years, 11 months ago
i have a sudden urge to go rhino hunting
MystBunny
4 years, 11 months ago
Aww, want to see the implied scene =9
Shryke
4 years, 11 months ago
I don't think Kazooie treated the realization trivially, like some mystery she just solved...
LatinoOso1965
4 years, 11 months ago
Great story im beginning to understand this story as a whole on the tragedies of Kazooie and she overcame them till she meets Banjo later on in life Bravo on this great storyline bravo to all of you .
Gennie
4 years, 11 months ago
Is there going to be ANY porn in this or?
twilightstormshi
4 years, 11 months ago
yep. pages 23-35
FrostbiteTiger
4 years, 11 months ago
i'd would show up there ready to adopt a couple of the girls and would more than likely show up again holding a couple wall mount's the those rhinos names on them
JimPaladin
4 years, 10 months ago
Alright, look.  Despite the fact this comic is incredibly awful in terms of dialogue and writing, I can see you people do put a lot of effort into it so I think it deserves an at least in-depth review.

Let me begin by saying that I stumbled across this thanks to a friend who showed it to me months ago, and we had fun reading the horribly over-serious tone of the story (It's a freaking Banjo-Kazooie story for fuck's sake.), and recently, (as in, just now) we both discovered this site as the sort of "source" of the comic (we'd been seeing it on places like DiviantArt and stuff), and I assume this must be the most recent page; so I did the thing that I KNEW I had to do, and signed up to this website in order to leave a tl;dr shit-fling at your comic.

That said;

While I outwardly admit this is horrible, I'll start from the beginning and explain why this story just isn't working.

First of all, like I said.  This is Banjo-Kazooie.  This story does not need a bunch of overly-dramatic themes about religion and rape and abusive child hoods and stuff.  Don't get me wrong, I'm all for writing in backstories to characters that don't have any, I'm not saying you're not allowed to imagine up a backstory for Kazooie, but you really have to keep in the theme of the source material, otherwise it's unfitting and weird.  

This doesn't feel like a Banjo-Kazooie story at all, and I mean that in a bad way.  This should have just been a story about Kazooie being an orphan in a plucky orphanage before escaping into the world, getting slightly depressed at the loss of her parents as she realizes they're actually dead, then meeting Banjo or something.  Not having satanist parents who die in a house fire before being taken in by a priest, where tons of religious themes are jammed down our throats, before he dies and then she's sent off to some abusive rape home.  

Other than the fact the tone is completely unfitting, the story itself is very, very weak.  We barely get any time with Kazooie's stepfather before he just dies and that entire chunk of the plot seems to hardly impact the rest of the story at all, it just seems to serve as an overly depressing moment for Kazooie to go through.  Then she had her school, where kids were mean to her or whatever (I forget just what happened there), but then that's just dropped and now she's here.

There barely even seems to be a plot to this mess.  It's just excuses and justifications to place Kazooie in increasingly bad, depressing situations for no other reason than to be all OH MY GOD LOOK HOW SAD THAT IS :,,,(.

Think about it, does a story about Banjo-Kazooie need to include child rape?  Like, did you even think that through at all?  Does it have anything to do with the story as a whole?  Does it impact the plot or the decisions of Kazooie in a way major enough to justify including it?  Or is it just THIS IS GOING TO BE SO SAD AND GRIM AND DARK WHEN PEOPLE SEE THEY RAPED THIS GIRL?  My money is on the latter.

While I have nothing but bad things to say about furries and about the plot of this story thus far, I will say there is a small bit of artistic talent here and you do manage to do a good job of making the art match the style of Banjo Kazooie.  I would strongly suggest you either drop this project entirely or at least start over.  

It wouldn't even be so bad if it was all grim and dramatic, to serve as a "mature" look at an otherwise kid-friendly story, but the plot itself is all over the place and bad and is clearly only there to make Kazooie's situation worse for no reason other than to generate easy sympathy for no reason.  It's a plot that serves nothing and has no purpose other than to be depressing while achieving nothing or giving any real messages outside of maybe just a generic "always be strong no matter what happens", which is middle-school level writing.

That's my take on it.  Good luck, I guess.
JimPaladin
4 years, 10 months ago
Edit: Nevermind, I read that you plan to include porn in this, making it a pornographic comic; so I guess plot has nothing to do with anything.

You sick fucking retards.
twilightstormshi
4 years, 10 months ago
first, let me just say, i've never seen a name that more quickly than yours reveals a commenter to be an often butthurt white knight XD thanks for coming all the way from 4chan :3 musta been a hard trip.

" JimPaladin wrote:
This should have just been a story about Kazooie being an orphan in a plucky orphanage before escaping into the world, getting slightly depressed at the loss of her parents as she realizes they're actually dead, then meeting Banjo or something.


what was that about middle-school writing? :3

i had just as much fun reading your comment as i suspect you did reading the comic! not that i don't get your points, but i would just be bored silly by your alternative plot there. of course, you're right that that plot would fit with the themes of the games much better. it's like one of those crappy comic-book series that the official company publishes to sell merchandise.

the theme of banjo-kazooie works because it's an adventure video game where being thrown into a silly world is an appropriate substitute for backstory. my story is hamfisted, full of time skips, and lacking enough scenes to tell the story i want to tell because of our page limit, but it doesn't sound like any of those is your problem with it! you'd complain about any story that treated banjo-kazooie seriously. if i spent years writing you an excellent, meaningful, nicely toned banjo-kazooie novel, it would still make you laugh because you can't see the characters as characters. you just see them and the world they live in as the stereotypes presented to you in the games.

i call the kind of thing you want to see "deck-of-cards" or "magic-the-gathering" writing. each character (and maybe even setting) has a special ability, and the way the story plays out simply depends on what's in your hand, how those abilities interact. there's only the illusion of depth beyond those abilities. everything's stupid and predictable, exposition isn't needed, and the audience feels led on. most importantly, there's no chance for any meaning to happen because the story doesn't contain the ingredients for it. fate stay night and fate zero are excellent examples of the failings of this style of storytelling.

this isn't the kind of fanfiction you're used to. instead of taking everything as a direct cue from the source material, i've co-opted some elements from the source material (kazooie, the general setting) and stuffed them into my own story. it's no wonder you're not comfortable with it!

i know this story doesn't work well (and mostly not for the reasons you're talking about). to tell you the truth, i hate my writing! especially in comics! but i'll tell you why i keep doing it: because a person has to write 10,000 crappy things before they can produce even one decent thing. to answer your question: yes, i've thought it all through. it's what i came up with, and i'm sorry you don't like it. but am i supposed to curl up and die because i've failed to impress one person? nuh uh :3 instead, i'm going to keep improving, and god knows if i'll ever impress you.

thanks for saying kitsu, the artist, has talent. i'm the writer, a different person. you can blame me for being what's wrong with this comic if you like :3 and thank you for your feedback. i appreciate you being concerned enough to actually detail why you hated it. oh! and i'm glad the comic entertained you :3 depending on your definition of what a writer is, you might say i had a real success here because you gave a shit at all ^~

last, judging by your second message, you think porn in a story means it has to follow a completely different set of rules and can't contain meaningful stuff? and you think that furry sex is sick? even though you enjoy video games starring furries? heheheh. to put it mildly, you're certainly not the kind of person we're producing this for.
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