CAUTION: This story contains mild violence and profanity. Reader discretion is advised.
Disclaimer: This is a work of fiction. Unless otherwise indicated, all the names, characters, events and incidents in this book are either the product of the author's imagination or used in a fictitious manner. Any resemblance to actual persons, living or dead, or actual events is purely coincidental.
Masala Chai
by IndigoNeko and TaintedThylacine
Epilogue
Monday, May 30th, 2016
Heinrich Pullman, better known as Henry to his friends or ‘that asshole’ to people on the other side of the courtroom, stepped out of the first floor of the building where his practice had their primary office. The monitor lizard cautiously tasted the air around him with his tongue while glancing up at the overcast sky. The combination of low pressure and high humidity almost certainly meant rain this evening.
Even the prospect of getting wet while watching his son’s game couldn’t spoil his good mood. He’d managed to score an excellent recent law-school graduate last week to handle the boring day-to-day work, and had just signed a contract to partner with one of the best lawyers in Philadelphia, a man who’d originally started with criminal defense before moving into litigation and eventually finance and estate planning. Even his secretary Leanne had approved of both of the new prospects.
Henry glanced around, watching the light foot traffic along the street before he hefted his briefcase and started walking, adjusting his collar and tie slightly with his free hand. He picked up his feet, moving quickly so as not to be late to his son’s little-league baseball game; having promised that he’d actually make it to this one after missing the last two.
The monitor lizard was looking forward to spending some time with his wife and their three children this evening, getting out of work early for the first time in over a month. Work had been busy, having to deal with the aftermath of the break-in that had left his previous partner dead. Luckily there wasn’t anything critical that had come up today, since he’d managed to hand off most of the litigation cases to other lawyers in the Camden area.
Actually, the only thing of interest that had come up today was a call from Mrs. Andreyev, who’d informed him that she and her husband would be visiting Philadelphia in the next two weeks and wanted to have dinner with him... and pay their respects to his deceased colleague, Allan Pratt.
Henry’s legs were starting to ache with the fast pace he’d set by the time he reached the parking garage where he’d parked his silver Maserati. He double-timed it up the stairs to the third floor, panting by the time he reached the top. He stopped for a moment, looking around. The back of his neck itched, like something was wrong. The small revolver that he’d just purchased a few weeks ago hung in its holster against the side of his chest like a lead weight.
Not seeing anything suspicious, he made his way past a dozen or so parked cars before he reached his own, fumbling in the pocket of his pants for the key fob. He pressed it to unlock the door as he approached, making the lights on the car flash. As he walked up to the driver’s side of his car, movement caught his attention and he quickly reached into his blazer, pulling out the snub-nosed GP100.
Something grabbed Henry’s arm and slammed it against the roof of his car, sending the gun flying over the roof and banging against another car on the other side. A second later he was spun around by someone much bigger than he was... a massive tiger, easily a foot taller and twice as big, wearing a black leather jacket and several gold necklaces over a white shirt.
“That was the wrong move, lizard-man,” the brawny tiger said, baring his fangs. Before Henry could react, the tiger raised his hand. Light glinted off the polished brass-knuckles covering the feline’s fist as it sped towards Henry’s face, and the world went dark.
An entertaining and well put together story that I enjoyed a lot.
I don't comment on each chapter... as well I read from a tablet that is a pain in the arse to type on... So I've saved my main niggles to the end.
You have some continuity issues... minor ones, but noticeable. The other is well... you repeat a lot. Probably 20,000 words over the course of the whole story could have been trimmed. I say this as both a writer in the past, and an editor for a lot of writers. (Under a different screen name.)
I look forward to reading a lot more about the family, and of course the new polycule. I wasn't envisioning their 1st time that way... so it will be interesting to see how you write more about their 'play' to see if what I would have done, happens.
An entertaining and well put together story that I enjoyed a lot. I don't comment on each chapter..
If you can message me some of the continuity errors or repeated sections that you've noticed, I'd love to correct them. Parts of this story were originally written back in 2016, so I had to heavily edit them before posting and I know I missed some things.
Thank you for the critique. If you can message me some of the continuity errors or repeated section
I shall endeavour to do so as soon as I have some time. As said... it was more just niggles than major things. Made a couple of things not quite gel together.
I shall endeavour to do so as soon as I have some time. As said... it was more just niggles than ma
