I have written a long story, and need somebody to look it over for errors. I started with a story somebody else wrote, with human, mostly female characters. I rewrote it as a furry story, with mostly male characters.
ALso, when you write a story where all the characters are the same sex you sometimes get into some awkward grammar. With opposite-sex characters you can use "he" and "she" to distinguish. the original tells only what the main character sees/does (except for the epilogue), so I also changed it to be first-person. Then a lot of scenes can be "I" and "he". So the main character's name, Wynn, should not occur outside of quotation marks, never in descriptive text.
Story codes: M/M, furry, cons, hanging, snuff, slow
Warning, it's 400,000 words long (in 7 sections).
If anybody is willing to either detail-edit or read it and comment on whether the overall story works (and especially whether my alternate ending is believable), please write me, APDamien@ca.rr.com
7 years, 1 month ago
23 Dec 2011 22:22 CET