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The Song Of The Sea Hunter

A Modern-Day Fox
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Keywords male 1115090, female 1004852, death 10993, multiple 1874, fishing 927, boat 846, hunt 489, tragedy 199, fossil 180, invention 57, ballad 53, leptictidium 34, innovation 4, messel 2
The Song Of The Sea Hunter

The Messel Pit is a wonderful source of fossils from the Eocene. At the time it was a sea that separated Europe from Asia. Carbon dioxide would collect in its waters until at intervals it was saturated; then any disturbance would cause it to release a giant cloud of the gas which suffocated any animal in range. Some of these would then fall into the sea, where the low-oxygen environment would preserve them as they turned into stone. One of the most curious of these eocene animals is the leptictidium; an extinct creature, 60-90cm in length with a long snout like an elephant shrew. They were peculiar in being entirely bipedal, something they share with only a few species throughout history, (humans being one.)
The hazards associated with paleontology are seldom fatal and the few that are usually have to do with nearby wars. Recently however, several researchers nearly joined their specimens in ancient death from what's been called “the Messel's last burp.” A layer of porous rock began to rapidly leak ancient carbon dioxide and monoxide when an overlying impermiable clay layer was breached. Luckily, three helicopters were delivering supplies at the time. These took to the air at once; two fanned fresh air down to the researchers while they made an escape in the third.
When the choking cloud had dissipated, they returned to digging and found, among other things, one of the best preserved specimens of leptictidium ever found. Identified as L. auderiense, it was a giant of its species, nearly a metre in length. The size and density of the bones indicated that it had been extraordinarily strong. The mystery around this fossil deepened, however when several bits of iron were found around the fossil, preserved because there had been nearly no oxygen at all. At first these were taken for meteoric iron; possibly from a strike that had triggered the outgassing which had killed the specimen. Yet there was no sign of injury. Then, under the fossil, they found a large, flattened iron bar, nearly as long as its bearer...


To-Te-Aue, The Mighty One, stood taller than any other.
She could outrun the threehorn and bring down the swiftclaw alone.
Her friend, I-Ae-Yaw, the black smith, had made a sword for her,
Like the footsword of the swiftclaw.
It brought plenty to her village and protected her from the greatbird.

To-Te-Aue, the Mighty One, was clever in her hunting.
She had brought her village meat from the land and from the sky.
She had brought them large meat and small meat and river meat, too.
But she wanted to bring meat from the Belching Sea,
To be the first Hunter Of All Places and live forever in songs.

To-Te-Aue, the Mighty One, would sometimes spend a day just thinking.
She sat beside the Belching Sea and watched it, thinking.
She saw dead branches floating out from the shore.
She saw sea birds paddling their feet.
She saw the fishing spiders pulling fish from the sea with their webs.

To-Te-Aue, the Mighty One, went to her friend, I-Ae-Yaw, the black smith.
She said, “You, who make the red rock twist as if it dances,
“Find a way to make a box with three sides big enough to hold me.
“Make it float like a solid log.
“I will ride in it when I hunt for meat in the Belching Sea.”

I-Ae-Yaw, the black smith, said to To-Te-Aue,
“Beware of the Belching Sea!
“Stories tell us that, when it belches,
“Everyone near it dies!
“I do not want my best friend to be gone forever!”

To-Te-Aue, the Mighty One, laughed at I-Ae-Yaw's words.
“Our mothers' mothers' mothers told these stories!
“The Belching Sea has not belched for a long time!
“I think that it has done with belching.
“I will hunt the meat of the Belching Sea for our village.”

I-Ae-Yaw, the black smith, cooked wood into forge wood.
He forged the red rock into black iron.
He made many nails for his box.
He twisted three nails into hooks, like a fishing spider's web,
For To-Te-Aue, the Mighty One, to catch fish, as they did.

I-Ae-Yaw, the black smith, cut down a tall tree.
With his saw, he cut it into boards and trimmed their sides straight.
Then he trimmed one end of one board at an angle.
He held it on top of another board with big rocks.
Then he used the first to guide him in trimming the next.

I-Ae-Yaw, the black smith, took the boards he had made.
They were so much alike, it was as if they had been born twins.
He nailed the angle-cut ends together and made a big angle.
From this, he made a box with three sides.
But when he put it in the river, water came in and it sank.

I-Ae-Yaw, the black smith, pulled his box out of the river.
He watched where the water came out again, where the boards touched.
He gathered pitch from the bug-sap trees and sand from the beach.
He stuffed this into every crack.
And when he put his box in the river again, it floated like a leaf.
And all of this took many days.

To-Te-Aue, the Mighty One, said to the village weaver,
“You, who turn mere plant fluff into coloured threads,
“And turn threads into coloured cloth to wear,
“Make a very long thread from spider's web!
“I will use it to hunt meat in the Beching Sea!”

The village weaver said to To-Te-Aue, the Mighty One,
“Beware of the Belching Sea!
“Stories tell us that, when it belches,
“Everyone near it dies!
“I do not want our best hunter to be gone forever!”

To-Te-Aue, the Mighty One, laughed at the village weaver's words.
“Our mothers' mothers' mothers told these stories!
“The Belching Sea has not belched for a long time!
“I think that it has done with belching.
“I will hunt the meat of the Belching Sea for our village.”

The village weaver caught one spider after another.
He teased each one, making it climb down its web, while he rolled it up behind
Onto a stick that he had stripped and polished.
These, he braided into a thick thread long enough to circle the village four times.
And all of this took many days.

To-Te-Aue, the Mighty One, took her floating box to the Belching Sea.
She took wood that I-Ae-Yaw had not used and the footsword of a swiftclaw.
She carved two feet, like the feet of a fishing bird, from the wood
To make her floating box move on the Belching Sea.
And this took another day.

To-Te-Aue, the Mighty One, got up at the next dawn.
She got into her floating box and kicked the water with her wood feet.
Far from the shore of the Belching Sea, where the fish birds hunt,
She tied an iron hook to her spider silk thread.
She dropped the hook into the Belching Sea with the end of the thread tied to her hand.

Suddenly, big waves made the floating box jump strongly.
The Belching Sea turned white, as if it were plant fluff.
To-Te-Aue, the Mighty One, cried out, “The sea is belching!”
Then she fell in her box as if she were dead
And the box fell down into the plant fluff sea and was never seen again.

To-Te-Aue, the Mighty One, was married to the hunt.
She had sex with anybody she wanted, but she never had a child.
She had two sisters and a brother, but they were not like her,
And their children were not like To-Te-Aue.
But To-Te-Aue, the Mighty One, brings meat to the village today!

I-Ae-Yaw, the black smith, remembered how to make a box with three sides that floats.
The village weaver remembered how to make long, strong thread from spider web.
They taught these things to their children and their children's children and after.
Others learned to use these things to hunt fish in the river.
That is how To-Te-Aue, the Mighty One, brings meat to the village today!
That is why we stay far from the Belching Sea!


Copyright © 2013 Allan D. Burrows, all rights hereby released in full to Dennis M. Falk, Happy Birthday!
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by DOtter
HAPPY BIRFDAY, QUOZL! (Sorry it's a little late. Again.)

Here's a ballad of an ambitious leptictidium huntress who wanted to be the first in history.

UPDATE -- Somehow several carriage returns got lost from the file, leaving stanzas unseparated. FIXED

UPDATE -- The first time I used the word "Messel," I miss-spelled  it. FIXED

Keywords
male 1,115,090, female 1,004,852, death 10,993, multiple 1,874, fishing 927, boat 846, hunt 489, tragedy 199, fossil 180, invention 57, ballad 53, leptictidium 34, innovation 4, messel 2
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Published: 10 years, 6 months ago
Rating: Mature

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dmfalk
10 years, 6 months ago
Oh, my! Thank you, Dee! Such a powerfully-written epic poem, and so sad... Worth the wait, though! :)

d.m.f.
DOtter
10 years, 6 months ago
Thanks, Dennis. I'm glad you enjoyed it. May this trip around the sun be your happiest journey yet!
dmfalk
10 years, 6 months ago
Thank you- One never knows, really... :)

d.m.f.
CyberCornEntropic
10 years, 6 months ago
Kind of reminds me of a mix of Polynesian or African oral legend mixed with the Kalevala, only less repetitive and not as long-winded.  I-Ae-Yaw especially reminds me of Ilmarinen, and To-Te-Aue has hints of Maui with her attempt to fish (only she was less lucky).
DOtter
10 years, 6 months ago
Wow, such erudite critique for my little tuning! *blushes* I'd have made it longer and more repetitive if I were writing it for a tribal audience. I was worried that my actual audience might get bored at its current length. (Cutting down is much harder than writing more, especially keeping the feel.) Honestly, I-Ae-Yaw was inspired more by Scotty or Tochirō Ōyama, but I guess it just goes to show that the archetype is an old one. (After a quick search, Ilmarinen reminds me of Hephaestus/Vulcan, so there's another example.) To-Te-Aue came from whole cloth, or as far as anything can be. I probably should have given the weaver a name, but I already had I-Ae-Yaw...

Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
CyberCornEntropic
10 years, 6 months ago
I know what you mean about the cutting down.  "Murdering your darlings", though necessary, can be quite painful.  At least what you were "murdering" wasn't something like the Kalevala.  Lönnrot's epic isn't only like opera in which it takes so long to get anywhere, but tends to be a little too repetitive in places, repeating lines a few too many times, in my opinion.  Then again, it may be that I'm no better than the actual audience you were worried about. :\  Comprehending poetry has never been one of my strong suits, so you ought to congratulate yourself for writing something I was able to easily get. :)

You're probably right about the smith archetype, although I would put To-Te-Aue as akin to the bold and headstrong hero-adventurer-warrior archetype even if she didn't live to see the results of her exploits.  Many knightly characters in medieval romances might be the closest I can think of at the moment.  As for the weaver, perhaps "Weaver" was his name, but you reworded it in the interests of avoiding repetition.  Many translators have run across similar challenges, and they weren't working with languages that would be as alien to a human as a leptictidium's would be.
DOtter
10 years, 6 months ago
The weaver's name was Weaver... I LIKE THAT!

I'm not that big a fan of poetry myself, but I'm glad I made something you found readable. It might have helped that it was a ballad; once, long ago -- very, very long ago -- it would have been put to music and sung by a bard. (I don't dare think about lepti music, though!)

...you know, that's probably why there's so much repetition in the Kalevala; it would have been sung in segments, it must have taken days to get through the whole thing!
CyberCornEntropic
10 years, 6 months ago
And who knows how good of a musician the leptic would have been? :p  Although, to be honest, a ballad would be a fluid thing, depending on whether the bard has to abridge it or embellish it any or whether they can remember it all.  Not to mention the above translation issues, balancing accuracy (which can be iffy anyway considering some words don't translate well) with a poetic sense.

At least they weren't my brand of leptics? :o  


Lönnrot actually compiled a lot of much smaller ballads and worked them together to write the Kalevala.  So, essentially you're right, although there wasn't a "whole thing" until Lönnrot created it, just lots of much smaller and easier to manage oral poems.
DOtter
10 years, 6 months ago
I guess, since we're making up their civilization from petrified skeletons, Lepti music was as rare and beautiful as we want it to have been. No doubt it suited Lepti tastes. i took my inspiration from Wintermage's stories and XianJaguar's pictures; so no, not your Leptics. (My goodness, Pau-Nahkwa was handsome! I like your Leptics.)
CyberCornEntropic
10 years, 6 months ago
Thank you. :)   (Ironic that it's the prudish one who does the naughtiest stuff with leptics, isn't it? :o )

Please don't think I was complaining that your leptis weren't my brand of leptics. :o  I was being tongue-in-cheek about that. :p  It's a wide, wide world after all, full of many times and many places for different cultures to develop, and that's without bothering with alternate realities. :D
DOtter
10 years, 6 months ago
Actually, I thought you were concerned that I was basing my Leptics on yours. *shriug* My derp either way. Happy Wester!
CyberCornEntropic
10 years, 6 months ago
Oh, sorry.  I didn't realize I'd come across that way. :(  I wasn't complaining either way.  I only wanted to show you something I'd done that was sort of related to the then current subject.
DOtter
10 years, 6 months ago
No need to be sorry, I wasn't offended. But we've already cleared-up what you actually meant. And thanks so much for showing me your leptics, they're fabulous! (which bears repeating) ;)
CyberCornEntropic
10 years, 5 months ago
Thank you.  
dmfalk
certainly thinks they are, especially that one.... :o
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