I am rewriting one of my stories to have a furry protagonist/victim, and I'd like to know if people would prefer a male or female victim. Also whether you would prefer it to be told in first person or third person. First person is more immediate, you get the person's emotions more directly. But the final paragraph when the victim's body is taken away comes like a slap in the face when the rest of the story is told first person.
Summary: The main character (MC) finds an adult arcade that has the machine she's been looking for: Virtual Hanging. MC goes in, pulls off her panties, and sits in the saddle with the built-in dildo in her cunt. The screen lights up to show an image of MC sitting on a horse, her hands tied and a noose around her neck. MC stacks tokens on the adjacent table, slips the cord around her neck, and deposits the tokens into the slot. MC taps the image of a riding crop.
The cord tightens around MC's neck, strangling her, while on the screen the horse runs out from under her, leaving MC hanging, her feet kicking as the noose jerks tight around her neck.
MC has a huge orgasm and reaches for the "Stop" button to release the cord from around her neck, but changes her mind and pulls her hand back. Instead, MC feeds her remaining tokens into the slot so the machine won't stop too soon.
I'm playing with three different endings:
a) Somebody comes by a few minutes later to dispose of her body
b) The machine automatically shuts off when she stops bouncing up and down on the dildo: dead customers don't come back and spend more money. She wakes up a few minutes later.
c) Leave it ambiguous: stop right after she feeds the last tokens into the machine; let the reader imagine whatever ending he/she likes.
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1. Should MC be male or female
2. Which ending should I use?
3. Tell it in third person (more remote emotionally) or first person (more immediate, but ending (a) would come like a slap in the face)
I'm posting this question in several furry forums. Please add your vote in the form of a comment (or send me a PM if you don't want to vote in public). Please vote only once.
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16 Sep 2016 07:47 CEST
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