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lerwin

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alright everyone first thank you for being a fan. it feels nice having some. now i have a couple of wuestiona for anyone who wants to answer so here we go

first which of the private school parts is your fave so far and why?

second what do you think of the characters in the series so far?

and third is there anything you have to say that might help me improve?
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Added: 5 years, 11 months ago
 
biggerstaff
5 years, 11 months ago
It's not bad. I don't really do the whole listing favorites thing, but as a whole, it's a pretty good story. I've always loved sexy school stuff.
TheBigKahuna
5 years, 11 months ago
1) I liked the first image that illustrated some of the naughty things the boys in class were thinking of doing to her.

2) I really like the affinity between teacher and student in this series, kind of innocently stumbling into the realization of how attractive her teacher is.

3) She really needs to get screwed by the teacher and her classmates, and while in class. I'd even chip in a bit for the commission if that were to take place=3
AlexanderValentine
5 years, 11 months ago
1) I can't pick a favorite. the whole idea of it is my favorite part
2) The characterization is great so far, but it is kinda odd to have a very small Ratio of Female:Male.
3) Not really, but i bet the teacher is probably looking over the edited pics, getting flustered, and "Daydreaming" then kinda has a bit of a guilt trip.
NeksusCat
5 years, 11 months ago
1) For me, all the stories are the best! Loved them quite much~ ^_~
2) Neat and lovely made characters, you really made them nice and right, pleasent to read about.
3) Don't know what to say here, just listen to your heart and muse and write more of the following story, i would love to read more! ^w^
foxfire1max
5 years, 11 months ago
1) My favorite is the third one. I always thought the teacherXstudents thing are cute ^^
2) The characters are great. Raccoon is a great character and the teacher is pretty sexy >.>
3) Nope. The comic is perfect. Just... need... more... pages! D:
SilverFurredKage
5 years, 11 months ago
Hey again, Lerwin ^^

1) Can't really choose; I'm digging the premise; and it's so open-ended, it's fun to just toss around possibilities ^^

2) I like Alex, personally...And of course; Labrn, being a good friend 'o mine; 'twas awesome to see him fill the role of the teacher.  (Would totally volunteer for a role if you were looking X3)

3) It seems that you have a good idea, and nicely paced story flow.  Every so often there's a lack of punctuation, or a bumpy transition; but overall it's a great read.  The only thing I'd really suggest is maybe ease the reader into the next part with a little more description?  I could probably demonstrate what I mean through writing or editing...  Maybe one of these days we could have an in-depth chat; via notes or something, comparing our writing styles?  I'd be glad to talk with a fellow writer ^^
LabrnMystic
5 years, 11 months ago
Well, I'm partially to blame there as well. Was suppose to help with proofreading but the app on my tablet was messing up. *sigh* I need a laptop again.
LabrnMystic
5 years, 11 months ago
The first one is still my favorite, even with my involvement. It was what brought me to you, and the last part where Alex is thinking "score!" XD

Well, Alex is pretty much the only main character. As we get to the later chapters, you can tell a bit more of ones we'll meet. Maybe a little bit about her room mate. I don't think you really touched on her except a line or 2.

How long do you want each story? Short chapters? More description? I think you're doing fine. Other than the typical spelling or grammar error that any of us would make, you're structure is fine. I or Kage can help fill more description and detail with you if you desire. :3

And once again *squeeze* I'm glad things are doing better over here. That you have a small following of folks who enjoy your writing. I'm happy to have worked with you and look forward to more future projects together. ^_^
lerwin
5 years, 11 months ago
thanks. this weekend ill try to find my notes on the rest of the planned stuff. might start thinking about part fours story. although if people like the idea maybe i should write a little story where alex tries some beer and has some interaction with her room mate. at this point she is to shy to do so without a little push or something
LabrnMystic
5 years, 10 months ago
You bet. Little in-betweens help flesh the world out and submerge us even further into the story. :3

I can search my notes for any of the upcoming chapters you may have sent.
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