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Bachri

Opinions needed on Wet Space

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Okay, I have everything planned out for the Wet Space series, but I can't help but feel that I've created the beginnings of an interesting "universe", as it were. I feel like I could expand on this and make something much more interesting out of it, like Ulysses could just be part of a bigger story. I want to act on this, but I might just end up making totally pointless stuff that just annoys everybody. So, for when I put up the last chapter and Epilogue, I want to know what you all think about expanding this sci fi adventure.

I could even go as far as, in the last few sentences, saying weather the Colombus blowing up was a cheesy "unanswered mystery" in order to end it there, or an even cheesier "act of sabotage" or something along those lines to reach a bigger plot. Please tell me what you guys think.
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Added: 7 years, 3 months ago
 
Azhire
7 years, 3 months ago
Hmmm... sounds interesting actually thinking about it now. I'd have to go back a reread. I'll let ya know. lol.
Dessedac
7 years, 3 months ago
i think it be fun i love reading about it you could have them find a tribe a of people withch would open up a lot more chapters and side stories ^ ^
Bachri
7 years, 3 months ago
Well, as explained in Chapter 3, the planet Ulysses is actually part of a large territorial expansion project for an unspecified government. I will be using that by the very end of the story and epilogue ^^ Beyond that, I'm not sure.
RuthofPern
7 years, 3 months ago
Right the way I see it is you have a few options.  You obviously have a great interest in a certain particular fetish...Which I do as well or I wouldn't be reading your works.

You have so far created only two things for the 'Universe' that you are considering creating.  The fruits and the Trineks.  Plus obviously the mysterious destruction of the ship and the hint of an expanding empire.

I would first say...ship obviously had a much bigger crew than 2, So why didn't the others make it to the pods?  Or how did only the two of them make it to the pods?

Second...the fetish aspect.  Why not make the Trineks attraction to the pee scented clothes a basis for other creatures.  Maybe the planets fauna could be attracted to, or suffering from a lack of natural salts found in Urea.  This gives you great opportunity to create other creatures, birds, fish etc. That can join your chars in relief etc.  It would be the bait as well for caputing a few as prey species.

Now you have completly naked chars with no clothing available at the possible onset of winter.  Skin and cure the fur of the prey species after consumption for warmth, but you could twist it so that the pelts are pee scented when dry.  Could be intersting when/if they are rescued!

When I left a comment regs a fruit only diet...try eating a lot of fruit for a while and find out what happens to your other bodily function...Hint hint.  It would be especially the case as your two anthro's descend from Carnivorous species not Vegitarians.

Hope that gives you a few clues.

Yours R.o.P.
Bachri
7 years, 3 months ago
"You have so far created only two things for the 'Universe' that you are considering creating.  The fruits and the Trineks.  Plus obviously the mysterious destruction of the ship and the hint of an expanding empire."

Don't forget about the planet and the O.R.C.S Scout Carrier "Colombus", hehe

"I would first say...ship obviously had a much bigger crew than 2, So why didn't the others make it to the pods?  Or how did only the two of them make it to the pods?"

That was mostly left obscure for the sake of convenience, but I can add to it and come up with something, like most of the rest of the crew was asleep during scheduled rest hours and the two characters were actually doing something. Kal could have been working on data analyzing (as described in the first chapter) and Armec could have been on his malfunctioned scout ship. I could iron out the details later.

"Second...the fetish aspect.  Why not make the Trineks attraction to the pee scented clothes a basis for other creatures.  Maybe the planets fauna could be attracted to, or suffering from a lack of natural salts found in Urea.  This gives you great opportunity to create other creatures, birds, fish etc. That can join your chars in relief etc.  It would be the bait as well for caputing a few as prey species."

Well first off, I had started planning for Trineks to be the only land-based life form native to Ulysses. They are herbivores and, being a species that is described as social, almost never attack eachother. My idea was to make it all the more difficult when hunting them became an inevitability, because hunting is an unknown concept to them. Although, now that I say it, it seems kinda pointless, lol.

As for the idea of urine-bait, I actually kinda like it. It gives me an idea that one of the characters might stumble upon a group of Trineks or other animals huddled around one of the pairs of pants that flew off at the end of chapter 3, trying to figure out what the smell is or, one by one, start trying to urinate on it themselves.

"Now you have completly naked chars with no clothing available at the possible onset of winter.  Skin and cure the fur of the prey species after consumption for warmth, but you could twist it so that the pelts are pee scented when dry.  Could be intersting when/if they are rescued!"

Winter is definitely going to happen at the next chapter. In fact, thats where it starts, and they don't have any animal furs. Unfortunately, I have no idea how curing is done, so I reflected that in the chapter by making it so that they have no idea how to make clothing out of natural resources. They can survive with the right precautions though, such as only going out at day and always having supplies for a fire at night.

"When I left a comment regs a fruit only diet...try eating a lot of fruit for a while and find out what happens to your other bodily function...Hint hint.  It would be especially the case as your two anthro's descend from Carnivorous species not Vegitarians."

I actually made a full description of just this part. They're both carnivores, and without meat, they can't process the fruits correctly. They try to offset this by eating more fruit but they find that doing this would deplete their stockpile, and they just slowly grow weaker anyway, so they decided to hunt. Heres a little spoiler, their combined fruit consumption was six fruits before they went out for the first hunt :)

And finally, once again, thank you very much for the well-detailed comment, and thank you for the ideas, and thank you for sticking with this series, and thank you for your opinions. This gave me tons of ideas and thoughts and I hope they lead to some great things in the coming storyline!
RuthofPern
7 years, 3 months ago
No problems mate.  Authors should stick together.  That's why when one asks for ideas, others should contribute them.  I like seeing new and interesting concepts that stretch boundaries into rarely written about sub-genres.   I will after editing the humans out of it, upload the rest of my material here...but I tend to set my stories in alternate realities on Earth, rather than in sci-fi.

My watersport contents are in the traditional sense though, and only used in sexplay.

Yours R.o.P.
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